Weddings are extrodinary events to take part in ones life. They are a time to remember as well as a special time to spend with the on you love. Weddings consist of many different things such as, bridesmaid, groomsmen, flower girls, ring bearers, and the list goes on. The most important parts to a wedding in my option are the decorations, location as well as the honeymoon.
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needs some serious revision brittany...first, you don't focus any of your introduction or thesis statement on second life...weddings do occur but where is that stated or even suggested in your ideas? secondly, there are many awkwardly worded sentences...those should be corrected...for instance "Weddings are extrodinary events to take part one ones life"...how does this relate to sl?you misspell "one" in the second sentence...you should do some reading on line for Second Life weddings and revise this along with your thesis statement and email to me asap!!
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